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* Jenny extorts extra money from the Man in Grey for going through the list in-between applicants and crossing out all the obvious Nazis; agreeing without much fuss, the Man in Grey ends up handing her an arbitrary amount of banknotes from his wallet without counting them out. | * Jenny extorts extra money from the Man in Grey for going through the list in-between applicants and crossing out all the obvious Nazis; agreeing without much fuss, the Man in Grey ends up handing her an arbitrary amount of banknotes from his wallet without counting them out. | ||
* Similar to Thor's, [[Doctor Know (925th Universe)|Doctor Know]]'s introduction scene is significantly expanded. He boasts of having “lived a thousand lives and journeyed to a thousand wolds”. The Man in Grey loses his cool and, snatching up the Doctor's incriminating picture of [[the Man in Black]], “tears it up like a deranged [[goblin]]”, only for the Doctor to use magic to repair it, then add that it was irrelevant anyway because he has several backup copies in his archives. He also taunts the Man in Grey by saying he might tell the [[Great Higher-Up]]s about the Man's involvement with “[[War in Heaven|the War—]]” before he is interrupted by the Man in Grey agreeing to his terms. | * Similar to Thor's, [[Doctor Know (925th Universe)|Doctor Know]]'s introduction scene is significantly expanded. He boasts of having “lived a thousand lives and journeyed to a thousand wolds”. The Man in Grey loses his cool and, snatching up the Doctor's incriminating picture of [[the Man in Black]], “tears it up like a deranged [[goblin]]”, only for the Doctor to use magic to repair it, then add that it was irrelevant anyway because he has several backup copies in his archives. He also taunts the Man in Grey by saying he might tell the [[Great Higher-Up]]s about the Man's involvement with “[[War in Heaven|the War—]]” before he is interrupted by the Man in Grey agreeing to his terms. | ||
* There is more focus on the [[Teleportation Gun]], which is stated to be “one use only”, ostensibly retroactively explaining why it never reappeared in the series (although this introduces an apparent contradiction with [[PROSE]]: ''[[Family Business (short story)|Family Business]]'' where Jenny implies that she tried to use it again when she was abducted by [[Jenny Nowhere (925th Universe)|Jenny Nowhere]]). Instead of using it on herself to escape the explosion within the building, she aims it at “Captain Omega” and his grenade, and ''they'' explode outdoors, just outside the window. This is bad news for the Man in Grey, who had still tried to escape by climbing out the window, although he suffers no serious injury. | * There is more focus on the [[Teleportation Gun]], which is stated to be “one use only”, ostensibly retroactively explaining why it never reappeared in the series (although this introduces an apparent contradiction with [[PROSE]]: ''[[Family Business (short story)|Family Business]]'' where Jenny implies that she tried to use it again when she was abducted by [[Jenny Nowhere (925th Universe)|Jenny Nowhere]]; this contradiction was resolved with a further edit on July 24th which broke the Fourth Wall by claiming the Gun could only be used “once per series”). Instead of using it on herself to escape the explosion within the building, she aims it at “Captain Omega” and his grenade, and ''they'' explode outdoors, just outside the window. This is bad news for the Man in Grey, who had still tried to escape by climbing out the window, although he suffers no serious injury. | ||
* [[0000-8888888]]'s spelled-out name of [[Tetra-None Hepta-Oct]] is mentioned, unlike the original, briefer scene in which only the numerical form was presented. She give more detail on her background, noting that she recently left [[Cyclock homeworld (925th Universe)|her homeworld]] for unspecified reasons; features of human culture to which she still has trouble acclimatising include “living in linear time” (“I keep forgetting that seconds happen consecutively, and that time passes whenever I speak”) as well as “the gender thing”, which Tetra states doesn't exist among the [[Cyclock (925th Universe)|Cyclock]]s, with [[time signature]]s being the closest concept. Tetra expresses willingness to use she/her pronouns “for now”, but to “give them all a try” over time. | * [[0000-8888888]]'s spelled-out name of [[Tetra-None Hepta-Oct]] is mentioned, unlike the original, briefer scene in which only the numerical form was presented. She give more detail on her background, noting that she recently left [[Cyclock homeworld (925th Universe)|her homeworld]] for unspecified reasons; features of human culture to which she still has trouble acclimatising include “living in linear time” (“I keep forgetting that seconds happen consecutively, and that time passes whenever I speak”) as well as “the gender thing”, which Tetra states doesn't exist among the [[Cyclock (925th Universe)|Cyclock]]s, with [[time signature]]s being the closest concept. Tetra expresses willingness to use she/her pronouns “for now”, but to “give them all a try” over time. | ||
* Jenny's conversation with Dynamite Thor towards the end of the story now takes place in the small personal office given to her by the Man in Grey as promised, rather than in the waiting room outside the interview room. | * Jenny's conversation with Dynamite Thor towards the end of the story now takes place in the small personal office given to her by the Man in Grey as promised, rather than in the waiting room outside the interview room. | ||
* Their heart-to-heart is significantly expanded, with Jenny sharing her feelings of loneliness and dissociation from reality, while Peter describes the failure of his superheroic career at somewhat greater length, mentioning that he has become redundant in his home universe thanks to the prevalence of other heroes such as [[the Dart]], [[the Spider Queen]], and [[Electro (Fox universe)|Electro]]. | * Their heart-to-heart is significantly expanded, with Jenny sharing her feelings of loneliness and dissociation from reality, while Peter describes the failure of his superheroic career at somewhat greater length, mentioning that he has become redundant in his home universe thanks to the prevalence of other heroes such as [[the Dart]], [[the Spider Queen]], and [[Electro (Fox universe)|Electro]]. | ||
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